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Tuesday, 31 July 2018

Awesome writing

Kia Ora, for the past few weeks I have been doing some writing that is called orientation and I will show you what a orientation. an orientation is a piece of writing that has who where when why. Here is my piece of writing that i have got to share with you.

''The bell rung for me to go home. I was so excited because tomorrow I am going to invercargill to see my sisters tomorrow.I am going because it is the school holidays.''
  

Can I please have some specific feedback on my next steps.
please do not hesitate to comment have good day bye.
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2 comments:

  1. Unknown31 July 2018 at 15:36

    Very nice Quaid, next time I would re read my sentence and make sure I haven't put words in twice, e.g tomorrow would be fine not having last one. Keep up the good writing

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  2. Quaid13 August 2018 at 12:07

    Thanks for your feedback and I will do that.

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