Today I have a updated my writing from Tuesday after following on some feedback. This is my writing that I have done. A massive shout out to my teacher Miss D for making all this learning happen and making my writing stronger with the feedback.
Here is my writing hope you enjoy.
Everything about her was a lie. We don't know why but her whole life was a lie. she became famous when all of the actors saw that she was just a lie. They thought to themselves"how can you just be a lie"
She went inside to everyone standing there asking her questions about her life wondering how she is a lie.She thought, “Why are they asking me questions? I am just a normal person in the normal world". But then she said to everyone in the room that she was a millionaire but that was a lie.
She didn't know how to stop the lies because her brain was too overpowered . She went to her friend's house thinking that she would understand everything but guess what her friend was a lie.
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